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    Default I see you

    A little different from what I usually write.



    I see you

    I look into your beautiful brown eyes,
    they tell me you are ready to rise,
    I see the ambition and the dreams you have,
    I see the same future you see,
    though
    I also see the sadness
    that came with all the madness
    you have seen with those eyes,
    I see the tears in the past you have already cried,
    They are still are there,
    Even though in the meantime
    they have dried.

    I see the tragedy
    those eyes have witnessed,
    the reality
    they have experienced
    I see the help these eyes have begged for,
    But were refused to be given, standing at the front door,
    I see the support these eyes asked for,
    The disappointment they had to deal with
    When from their home they were banned,
    Because support wasn’t granted.

    But what I do also see
    is the love
    and affection
    these eyes are expressing,
    These eyes are telling me
    that the person they belong to is ready
    to take care of those who love you
    deeply and truly.
    These eyes let me know that the time has come
    to leave all the bad behind
    and move on
    to something lasting,
    something as beautiful,
    as your big, beautiful, brown eyes.
    Writing a verse every day, keeps the psychologist away.

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    great work.

    Makes me wanna start writing.

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    Quote Originally Posted by donBenito View Post
    great work.

    Makes me wanna start writing.

    Thank you.

    I was looking at pics of my fiancé when I had the idea to write this. Having his story and past in mind, I felt like I had to write something about him. I wrote it last night and showed it to him this morning. He loved it, without knowing it was about him in the first place. He said he could relate. After he said that, I told that it actually is about him.



    I told you to post your works. I'd really like to read your stuff.
    Writing a verse every day, keeps the psychologist away.

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    I'll put some stuff up when I form something complete. I haven't tried a lot but being open without boundaries and still be coherent is something i struggle with.

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    Quote Originally Posted by donBenito View Post
    I'll put some stuff up when I form something complete. I haven't tried a lot but being open without boundaries and still be coherent is something i struggle with.
    Uknow writing poetry is like every other kind of art.

    YOU are the artist, so you create sth. the way you want it. I post verses too when I feel like. Doesn't have to be a complete poem.
    Writing a verse every day, keeps the psychologist away.

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